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The only man that tries.
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So i thought id write a poem
for everyone who feels alone
for everyone who feels unloved
for anyone who has no hope.
And so i thought id be that guy
who can make their dreams fly
who will be the one that tries
be the one that makes them smile
And i thought id be the one
to make the pain go undone
to make the memories die young
stop them from running from the sun
Oh how i want to be that guy
who sees the tears flow out their eyes
and make the pain cease when it tries
and make them feel like its alright
but when i try to be that guy
seems that my words are despised
and that flow of love goes dry
and I would be cast away like flies
But i Will be that guy
because i know that given time
that anyone that needs a friend
will look towards the only man that tries.
for everyone who feels alone
for everyone who feels unloved
for anyone who has no hope.
And so i thought id be that guy
who can make their dreams fly
who will be the one that tries
be the one that makes them smile
And i thought id be the one
to make the pain go undone
to make the memories die young
stop them from running from the sun
Oh how i want to be that guy
who sees the tears flow out their eyes
and make the pain cease when it tries
and make them feel like its alright
but when i try to be that guy
seems that my words are despised
and that flow of love goes dry
and I would be cast away like flies
But i Will be that guy
because i know that given time
that anyone that needs a friend
will look towards the only man that tries.
Trying to help those who feel like i used to. Sometimes, or a lot of the time i don't really get a chance to help them due to lack of communication or just unwillingness, you cant help someone who doesn't want to be helped, or at least not by you. So ill wait until i am needed but ill always show them that i care.
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I am here on behalf of #PoeticalCondition to provide my critique.
this is the story of my life. Wow. Well done.
What I love most about this story is how you've captured that kindness in this simplicity. It leaves no doubts over what your intentions are.
The only changes you can make is the "i". Just thought I'd let you know on this: when a person uses "i" very often, it does not indicate that he is always bad in grammar or is careless in his spelling. It signifies a certain... disregard of what they truly are... in this particular poem, it could have a deeper implication, that you tend to be passive... you're not entirely altruistic, but you have shades of grey which you know must exist... you grant everyone a comfort zone, and prefer being an outsider...
In that sense, the use of "i" is well used. But then again, its just me, trying to find too many deeper meanings in minor things. I leave it to you to decide what you want to do with the "i".
All by all, not bad. Keep writing.
this is the story of my life. Wow. Well done.What I love most about this story is how you've captured that kindness in this simplicity. It leaves no doubts over what your intentions are.
The only changes you can make is the "i". Just thought I'd let you know on this: when a person uses "i" very often, it does not indicate that he is always bad in grammar or is careless in his spelling. It signifies a certain... disregard of what they truly are... in this particular poem, it could have a deeper implication, that you tend to be passive... you're not entirely altruistic, but you have shades of grey which you know must exist... you grant everyone a comfort zone, and prefer being an outsider...
In that sense, the use of "i" is well used. But then again, its just me, trying to find too many deeper meanings in minor things. I leave it to you to decide what you want to do with the "i".
All by all, not bad. Keep writing.