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Shed a tear for the Marine

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Shed a tear for the Marine
for he is not allowed to cry
He's as tough as he can be
And they're never allowed to hide

Shed a tear for the Marine
for when the world is calling
They are the first ones to the field
To fight for those that have fallen

I shed a tear for my Marine
For he means the world to me
And I feel safer now at night
Knowing he's watching over me

Shed a tear for the Marine
For time doesn't fly by
Three long months in Paris Island
And he's a Marine until he dies

So Shed a tear for the Marine
For he is not allowed to cry
He is more than just a soldier
He is a friend to all mankind
A poem I wrote for my brother, PFC Johnny Christopher Jones. Perhaps my biggest inspiration.
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I have already commented on this piece, but I will give you a little bit more of a critique <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" title=":) (Smile)"/> This piece is a wonderful, holding so much emotion and meaning. This is a piece to be proud of.

I have a number of favourite parts in this. Firstly, the opening stanza which just has such a sad meaning:

"Shed a tear for the Marine
for he is not allowed to cry
He's as tough as he can be
And they're never allowed to hide"


Though, my overall favourite stanza is the last one:

"So Shed a tear for the Marine
For he is not allowed to cry
He is more than just a soldier
He is a friend to all mankind"


The impact is such a strong one, I just want to hug you for it <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="38" height="15" alt=":hug:" title="Hug"/>

The only thing I suggest you do is place in commas and full stops <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h…" width="15" height="13" alt=":heart:" title="Heart"/>